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Lead wings upon a still wind
Dreams sail but will never land
As the dust collects the sand
Never to return again

Like waves ‘neath the moon rescind
A breath lasts threescore and ten
Questions stay unanswered when
Still inside the dying man

Unlike tree’s branches ascend
The lethargic, sleeping one
Never rises to the sun
Nothing for him shall await

Rigid and stiff, how he stands
The reed which doth not placate
The wind, it will bend and break
And its pieces shall be shunned

Cloth unravels at frayed ends
For once-tight thread now is loose
The lying tongue now speaks truth,
“Can’t erase a broken slate.”

Vengeance never makes amends
The shaking hand passes hate
Toothless vampires still shall take
Never blood but all your life

Rise to meet, the depths ascend
Weighted wings not made for flight
Still so heavy, seem so light
Falls from thirteen stories high
©2007-2009 ~Necrosapien
:iconnecrosapien:

Author's Comments

I'm not sure it's that good...something just seems wrong, but it's finished and I don't know how to fix it.

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:iconroseblossom100:
Wow, your vocabulary is amazingly displayed in this piece! I love the flow this has as well as the deep meanings it implies. Good job!

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Stupidity breeds pain.-Me!!! Yes I did make it up.
:iconnecrosapien:
Thank you very much. I tried to make the stanzas flow into each other as much as possible and to add meanings within meanings that way. Some have a few different ways to be read, which hopefully adds to the poem.

I cannot write "real" poetry, so I often end up with a lack of meter, or semeblence of structure. I tried to add some of both in this, but it is not structured my much sense of the word, regardless.

Thank you for taking the time to read it.

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A man can be destroyed but not defeated.

- Ernest Hemingway
:iconroseblossom100:
your welcome. it was very well written.

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Stupidity breeds pain.-Me!!! Yes I did make it up.
:iconselfaffliction:
Nice! I like it! Beautiful flow of dark meaning. What inspired you, m'love?

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"But when you depart from me, sorrow abides and happiness takes it's leave..."
:iconnecrosapien:
Not really sure. More than likely another persistant state of depression. ^^

That and I wanted to include a lot of symbolism etc. Look into it...there shoudl be a few neat things there.

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A man can be destroyed but not defeated.

- Ernest Hemingway

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